Hip-Hop Artists Yourself? Submit your lyrics and let them be heard

I'm an aspiring hip-hop eemee and wanted a place where other hip-hop artist that are in this union can post there lyrics and get feedback on  them.

This is lyrics to a track call 'Follow Me To Hell' that's suppose to be on a mixtape that im working on that suppose to be out sometime next year.

Follow Me To Hell Back Deeper In The Grave Back To The Roots/
Forget Life,Forget Loot, Forget Dirt On Your Suit/
Zone out Reality By Now You Should See My Image/
Let's go back in history and lets get Vegeance/
Go against these **** We cant fail this Mission/
Life days are like hole's all of them are ditches/
We going against the politics no backing down or retreatments/
Enemie's are like diseases if ur infected you aint needed/
I'm firing shots at their dungeon i hope their not sleep/
I'll run up in it and the last bit of there life can count sheeps/
Their recruiting members but im looking to dismember/
The crew leave a remain few chop their ass in a blender/
Their meat is tender and blood is the attention of center/

I'm grinding real hard until i get back onto the top

and im so dam fresh you can smell me through a ziplock

i spit barz, i spit barz, i spit barz,
eh, i spit barz, i spit barz, i spit barz,
ya feel me?, i spit barz, i spit barz, i spit barz,
i thought i told you dudes...i spit barz

I think that's a multiplatnium record right there. d4L ain't got **** on me

I'm grinding real hard until i get back onto the top

and im so dam fresh you can smell me through a ziplock

 

GamerBoyAdvance

plagiarism ftw? :roll: 

[QUOTE="GamerBoyAdvance"]

I'm grinding real hard until i get back onto the top

and im so dam fresh you can smell me through a ziplock

 

WorstGameEver

plagiarism ftw? :roll:

[QUOTE="WorstGameEver"][QUOTE="GamerBoyAdvance"]

I'm grinding real hard until i get back onto the top

and im so dam fresh you can smell me through a ziplock

 

HaSheeSh_basic

plagiarism ftw? :roll:

Some more lyrics from rhymebook

I Been Gettin Cake Like Pills Bury Dough Boy
Stay Fresh But A dude Never Touched Dope Boy
This beat im upgradin it nah im tearing it
and the money gets more marriages than maryland
The Way I Popped Them Bottles My Name Should Be Faygo
If bullets are my snaps then im D4L Fabo
Flow so retarded call me dat **** radio
Every punchlines seems like i let a Mistle-Go
Never saw a penny because im use to benjamin franklin
Naw it aint christmas but my balls be jangaling(haha)
Ankling man the money keep it sprankaling
Yall boys the titanic yall boys sanken
Upgrade my flow and u got military status
Flow is death so when i spit it causes tragics
Jay Breeze the new and improve rapper eater
cuz im dishin these eemces out disses like bird feeders
The Undisputed Leader,Keep Freaky chickens That Like 2 Tease Us
I'm the technition tell that girl im bout to tweak-her
In the rap game man yall know im Irreplacable
Lyrics is seduction make these hoes get sexual

I never heard no-one say that i swear i wuz freestyling and it came outGamerBoyAdvance

tell that to Jigga

I never heard no-one say that i swear i wuz freestyling and it came outGamerBoyAdvance

That's like playing off the your girl's got a lazy eye line, as something new...

[QUOTE="WorstGameEver"][QUOTE="GamerBoyAdvance"]

I'm grinding real hard until i get back onto the top

and im so dam fresh you can smell me through a ziplock

 

HaSheeSh_basic

plagiarism ftw? :roll:

106 and Park and later on the "Drop It Like It's Hot" (Remix)

Genis is my name, big penis is my game
Eragon_11

Lyrics from my rhymebook

You must be reatarded/for getting this beef started /Just for the record i dont mess with intellectual rejects/you better not forget/I will diffrentiate and integrate you/I have got a bigger dick than you/fake internet thug pretending like he packing pistols/So better suck on my schlong(nullus)/or i will  not let you make a song.

for me, 50 cent is no match

from me, there isn't one fan he could snatch

he should just sit on duck eggs until they hatch

the eggs that don't hatch, he can throw them around and play some catch

it looks like it is time for him to retire

all he can do is blow tire after tire