Anyone Want To Rate My Lyrics?

Working Title: Streetlight

A light goes out across the street

Our dreams all fade away

The king is gone, the duke is dead

Our kingdoms gone astray

All the friends we drift apart

As our hair all fades to grey

Some dreams may come true

But some just fade away

Alone and dark, the light is out

I cannot find my way

I need a hand to help me, guide me

Save my soul today

I just need a friendly face to lift this shadow

And ease my pain

I'm at the bottom of this wheel

Now spin me round your way

Second rate it burns my soul

I'm looked upon with shame

All my dreams just fade away

Maybe I'm the one to blame

I dont know if this kind of thing usually gets done here, but I need someone's opinion.

It's my first song, so go easy:) 

Level 17 with 2 posts! anyways I liked it. I thought your use of words was pretty well thought out.TheJustin

It's good, but my girlfriend writes better than this.dark_templar_99

Thanks for the replys. 

lvl 17 with 2 posts?! BEAN_LARD_MULCH

And I have no idea what that means.