Hows my rap?

shells hit in your lungs leave rappers with cracked faces
act patient or you might get smacked tasteless
embrace this as i rip this **** slide in the clips and spit
bullets hit people harder than chinese Athramatic
im quick to **** on cowards aint no stoppin me
like popcorn bags with no seeds, no way you poppin me
droppin me? im too much realeasin the untamed prophecies
Thinkin you hot? I got "chilly bullets" that stop ya "heat"
fall back as i pack clipz to make you fall flat
got these rappers coming up like a shorty on a stick like a small bat
i maul all cats with all gats
just kock and aim at their lames,say no names, hollow tips turnin dudes feminine like they changed Frames wit Dames
remain insane, kill verbals on tracks as i murder with gats
and pack bullets dat make ya head come outta fitted like you had "convertible hats"
the murder is back, bringin pain and smashin contenders
got slugs that made ya Athreis "Pop out" like "Air bags" when you crash into fenders

this is the 2nd part of my verse. ive been writing since i was 13, i dont know how is it though :?

At least your better then Lil WayneAnti-Venom

Was that a compliment :lol: , i really dont write songs as much anymore. now i just battle rap

That was wiggity wiggity wack you need to stop with all that

Cause the only place you'll ever shoot someone with a gat is in your rap

I mean for Gods sake your on an internet forum relax and post

because if you mess with us we'll grab the butter then the mods will toast

Get banned Mr. Break Fest slap syrup on you don't test this

I'm serious they call me the no0b popper I shoot cats down with my roflcopter

BOOYAAAHH!! *cool pose*

i maul all cats with all gats

realistic44

That was wiggity wiggity wack you need to stop with all that

Cause the only place you'll ever shoot someone with a gat is in your rap

I mean for Gods sake your on an internet forum relax and post

because if you mess with us we'll grab the butter then the mods will toast

Get banned Mr. Break Fest slap syrup on you don't test this

I'm serious they call me the no0b popper I shoot cats down with my roflcopter

BOOYAAAHH!! *cool pose*

CrystalFox

That... was... awesome.

[QUOTE="CrystalFox"]

That was wiggity wiggity wack you need to stop with all that

Cause the only place you'll ever shoot someone with a gat is in your rap

I mean for Gods sake your on an internet forum relax and post

because if you mess with us we'll grab the butter then the mods will toast

Get banned Mr. Break Fest slap syrup on you don't test this

I'm serious they call me the no0b popper I shoot cats down with my roflcopter

BOOYAAAHH!! *cool pose*

psn8214

That... was... awesome.

Thank you, thank you very much.

Woah TC, you iz liek all gangstah!

That was wiggity wiggity wack you need to stop with all that

Cause the only place you'll ever shoot someone with a gat is in your rap

I mean for Gods sake your on an internet forum relax and post

because if you mess with us we'll grab the butter then the mods will toast

Get banned Mr. Break Fest slap syrup on you don't test this

I'm serious they call me the no0b popper I shoot cats down with my roflcopter

BOOYAAAHH!! *cool pose*

CrystalFox

Rap is awful in written text. Record it.

Typical, egotistical rap lyrics... Not my mug of beer. This exactly what's wrong with most hip-hop lyrics.

That was wiggity wiggity wack you need to stop with all that

Cause the only place you'll ever shoot someone with a gat is in your rap

I mean for Gods sake your on an internet forum relax and post

because if you mess with us we'll grab the butter then the mods will toast

Get banned Mr. Break Fest slap syrup on you don't test this

I'm serious they call me the no0b popper I shoot cats down with my roflcopter

BOOYAAAHH!! *cool pose*

CrystalFox

Yeah i got to give you credit man, that was insane. you want to come to connecticutt i got a tag team battle rap coming upyo 8)

That was wiggity wiggity wack you need to stop with all that

Cause the only place you'll ever shoot someone with a gat is in your rap

I mean for Gods sake your on an internet forum relax and post

because if you mess with us we'll grab the butter then the mods will toast

Get banned Mr. Break Fest slap syrup on you don't test this

I'm serious they call me the no0b popper I shoot cats down with my roflcopter

BOOYAAAHH!! *cool pose*

CrystalFox

This weapon that stay attached to me, is grazin your anatomy
This gray one'll make you call a doctor ,call up Grey's Anatomy
I be pushin cars out the garage like it's a factory
Service with a smile, serve a hatin rapper happily
Never miss a penny, you can't count your dough exact as me
Push come to shove, I'm pickin up money just like a vacuum G
Always makin dough, got a bunch of Keeblers after me :shock:
Pro at bein active like what Puffy use for ac-a-ne :lol:

[spoiler] I didnt write this [/spoiler]

This weapon that stay attached to me, is grazin your anatomy
This gray one'll make you call a doctor ,call up Grey's Anatomy
I be pushin cars out the garage like it's a factory
Service with a smile, serve a hatin rapper happily
Never miss a penny, you can't count your dough exact as me
Push come to shove, I'm pickin up money just like a vacuum G
Always makin dough, got a bunch of Keeblers after me :shock:
Pro at bein active like what Puffy use for ac-a-ne :lol:

Tjeremiah1988

Sounds like Young Dro. :lol:

Hehe its just what I've been looking for...............

[QUOTE="CrystalFox"]

That was wiggity wiggity wack you need to stop with all that

Cause the only place you'll ever shoot someone with a gat is in your rap

I mean for Gods sake your on an internet forum relax and post

because if you mess with us we'll grab the butter then the mods will toast

Get banned Mr. Break Fest slap syrup on you don't test this

I'm serious they call me the no0b popper I shoot cats down with my roflcopter

BOOYAAAHH!! *cool pose*

realistic44

Yeah i got to give you credit man, that was insane. you want to come to connecticutt i got a tag team battle rap coming upyo 8)

Too far for me. And wait a min, please don't tell me you're planning

on attending that freestyle battle with an already written rap? (in other words, the one you posted)

Well, could you rewrite it in English?

[QUOTE="realistic44"]

[QUOTE="CrystalFox"]

That was wiggity wiggity wack you need to stop with all that

Cause the only place you'll ever shoot someone with a gat is in your rap

I mean for Gods sake your on an internet forum relax and post

because if you mess with us we'll grab the butter then the mods will toast

Get banned Mr. Break Fest slap syrup on you don't test this

I'm serious they call me the no0b popper I shoot cats down with my roflcopter

BOOYAAAHH!! *cool pose*

CrystalFox

Yeah i got to give you credit man, that was insane. you want to come to connecticutt i got a tag team battle rap coming upyo 8)

Too far for me. And wait a min, please don't tell me you're planning

on attending that freestyle battle with an already written rap? (in other words, the one you posted)

Oh nope, that just a song verse. i never go to battles and pre-write raps thats kind of cheating in a way :P

[QUOTE="CrystalFox"]

[QUOTE="realistic44"]

Yeah i got to give you credit man, that was insane. you want to come to connecticutt i got a tag team battle rap coming upyo 8)

realistic44

Too far for me. And wait a min, please don't tell me you're planning

on attending that freestyle battle with an already written rap? (in other words, the one you posted)

Oh nope, that just a song verse. i never go to battles and pre-write raps thats kind of cheating in a way :P

At least your better then Lil WayneAnti-Venom

[QUOTE="Anti-Venom"]At least your better then Lil WayneJaks_Secret

[QUOTE="Jaks_Secret"][QUOTE="Anti-Venom"]At least your better then Lil WayneAssassin1349

[QUOTE="Assassin1349"][QUOTE="Jaks_Secret"] Hah. Hahahahaha. No. Jaks_Secret

[QUOTE="Jaks_Secret"][QUOTE="Assassin1349"] I'm sorry but he's right. Lil Wayne is way worse Assassin1349

[QUOTE="realistic44"]

[QUOTE="CrystalFox"]

Too far for me. And wait a min, please don't tell me you're planning

on attending that freestyle battle with an already written rap? (in other words, the one you posted)

Tjeremiah1988

Oh nope, that just a song verse. i never go to battles and pre-write raps thats kind of cheating in a way :P

Damn, and he still bombed. Btw it's cheating period realistic44, not "in a way". ~_0

[QUOTE="Assassin1349"]

[QUOTE="Jaks_Secret"] Absolutely not. Lil Wayne isn't god, but he's a good rapper. And this isn't trash, but it's not particularly quality rap. Work on it. Jaks_Secret

[QUOTE="CrystalFox"]

That was wiggity wiggity wack you need to stop with all that

Cause the only place you'll ever shoot someone with a gat is in your rap

I mean for Gods sake your on an internet forum relax and post

because if you mess with us we'll grab the butter then the mods will toast

Get banned Mr. Break Fest slap syrup on you don't test this

I'm serious they call me the no0b popper I shoot cats down with my roflcopter

BOOYAAAHH!! *cool pose*

psn8214

That... was... awesome.

But have you ever actually listened to Lil Wayne? Jaks_Secret

[QUOTE="Jaks_Secret"]But have you ever actually listened to Lil Wayne? Assassin1349

Overall I think he's bad, but I'll admit he does have some killer ass punchlines here and there.

But have you ever actually listened to Lil Wayne? Jaks_Secret

[QUOTE="Jaks_Secret"]But have you ever actually listened to Lil Wayne? Assassin1349

[QUOTE="Assassin1349"]

[QUOTE="Jaks_Secret"]But have you ever actually listened to Lil Wayne? Jaks_Secret

I like lil wayne but he is pretty much overrated and i did check out most of his writtens/freestyles as well such as the upgrade u freestyle. his punches sound so elementarywhere as in DZK i think is truly a much better rapper overall, imo.

My eyes were bleeding but it was a humourous read.