My poetry school assignment

ok a while ago i had to edit a poem from a nursery rhryme for my writing class right. and i got jack and jill so i edited it and it goes like this...

Mac and bill

ran down the hill

to drive their brand new viper

the brake got stuck

they hit a truck

and ran over peter piper

And she gave me an f cause she thought i copied from a website cause she wouldnt beleive i made it so she said i have another chance to make one do you guys have any ideas?

Jack And Jill went down the hill

But Jack he stumbled on a mill

With rocks and socks the mill it groaned

But Jill reached a hand and Jack he took

With gratitude Jack he thanked

Jill who cheered, and with the mill behind

Both Jack and Jill went down a hill.

ok a while ago i had to edit a poem from a nursery rhryme for my writing class right. and i got jack and jill so i edited it and it goes like this...

Mac and bill

ran down the hill

to drive their brand new viper

the brake got stuck

they hit a truck

and ran over peter piper

And she gave me an f cause she thought i copied from a website cause she wouldnt beleive i made it so she said i have another chance to make one do you guys have any ideas?

Master_Zandor

Bob and bill

Went out to kill

The stupid english teacher

When they were done

They went out to have fun

To celebrate killing the creature!

YAY!!!!!

Well did you copy it? Tell her if she can find the same thing somewhere on the internet, you'll take a 0. That'll show her you mean business. That's what I would do.needled24-7

Jack And Jill went down the hill

But Jack he stumbled on a mill

With rocks and socks the mill it groaned

But Jill reached a hand and Jack he took

With gratitude Jack he thanked

Jill who cheered, and with the mill behind

Both Jack and Jill went down a hill.

That kind of thing? Sorry, no expert on nursery rhymes..Vfanek

[QUOTE="Vfanek"]

Jack And Jill went down the hill

But Jack he stumbled on a mill

With rocks and socks the mill it groaned

But Jill reached a hand and Jack he took

With gratitude Jack he thanked

Jill who cheered, and with the mill behind

Both Jack and Jill went down a hill.

That kind of thing? Sorry, no expert on nursery rhymes..southy787

I know, I know. As I said I'm no expert when it comes to nursery rhymes, that was but one ot see if I was on the right track. I cannot help if I don't know what I am helping with. 

Jack and jill

each took a pill

to rid the world of their laughter

jill fell down

jack made no sound

it couldn't have gone any faster 

And she gave me an f cause she thought i copied from a website cause she wouldnt beleive i made it so she said i have another chance to make one do you guys have any ideas?Master_Zandor

She gave you an F because she thought you stole it from somewhere on the internet. So now you want to steal one from someone on the internet?

Yay for logic.

[QUOTE="Master_Zandor"]And she gave me an f cause she thought i copied from a website cause she wouldnt beleive i made it so she said i have another chance to make one do you guys have any ideas?Snomel

She gave you an F because she thought you stole it from somewhere on the internet. So now you want to steal one from someone on the internet?

Yay for logic.

yeah now im going to steal one and see if its like reverse phycology