What do you think of my argument paper? Effective? Long read.

Good paper....wrong causeBoobDude

What do you mean by wrong cause? Can you elaborate?

That was a long read and to be honest I just glanced over it, but honestly I don't think homosexuals should be allowed to adopt kids or have any kids in general not because I hate gays or what ever (personally I think they should be allowed to do what ever they wanted just so long as they would quite complaining) but because have you ever thought about what other kids would say to another kid with gay parents? "Ow hay Timmy did your Dad enjoy getting reared up the @$$ last night?". Kids get picked on enough these days, I don't even want to imagine how screwed up little Timmy would be knowing his 2 Dads were Butt pirates. But what ever that is just my opinion.TrailorParkBoy

Basically, the last 6 paragraphs address this issue. What you say was true 10 years ago, but kids today are MUCH more accepting of different lifestyles. Besides, since when do children talk about their parent's sex life? That is just disgusting.

well i dont agree with the hole gay marriage thing...not sayin your paper is bad, its a good paper, just you got a different point of view then i do on itBoobDude

Ok, I thought you meant my paper was for a bad cause or something. I didn't quite understand, but now I do. May I ask why you don't believe gay people should be allowed to marry or serve in the military? I have to find a common ground between the two arguments in my next paper but I haven't really come across a good enough argument or point against gay marriage that I could elaborate more on and possibly find a common ground.

[QUOTE="TrailorParkBoy"]That was a long read and to be honest I just glanced over it, but honestly I don't think homosexuals should be allowed to adopt kids or have any kids in general not because I hate gays or what ever (personally I think they should be allowed to do what ever they wanted just so long as they would quite complaining) but because have you ever thought about what other kids would say to another kid with gay parents? "Ow hay Timmy did your Dad enjoy getting reared up the @$$ last night?". Kids get picked on enough these days, I don't even want to imagine how screwed up little Timmy would be knowing his 2 Dads were Butt pirates. But what ever that is just my opinion.MotherSuperior

Basically, the last 6 paragraphs address this issue. What you say was true 10 years ago, but kids today are MUCH more accepting of different lifestyles. Besides, since when do children talk about their parent's sex life? That is just disgusting.

I'm reading your essay now, but already have issues with your introduction. You asked questions. Don't ask questions! Don't use the word "amazing" you make the essay sound informal.

Don't use the word I in an essay. You make it look informal again, like you are talking to someone. It comes off conversational. You need to take yourself out of the essay.

Who is Richard L. Worsnop? Is he a reporter? A scientist? A gay activist?

What is The American Enterprise? A "think-tank?" A gay activists group?

If any of your sources are biased or are journalists think about finding a different source. Journalists just report what they are told and sometimes inject their opinions into an article. If you want to quote info from a legit researcher that was interviewed by a journalist then use the researcher as your source, not the journalist.

If I find more stuff to whine about I'll list them.

EDIT: You have an issue with the essay sounding conversational. Now, you may have a large vocabulary, but when an essay sounds conversational like this words like "paradox" look as if you used Word's thesaurus. If you can change the tone of your essay to sound more professional then the larger vocab words won't sound so out-of-place.