An Unnamed Sci-Fi Concept

Linkage and whats.

I cranked up some random electronic music and just bloody wrote, which felt great. I've been meaning to incorporate several of the ideas that I have here into a story, and there's more to be added down the line.

Notes:

-I intended to make the work a sci-fi book in the more c1assic fashion, yet make one that wasn't bogged down with pointless character thinking and badly written exposition in the opening chapter, which they all seem to have. I'd rather start it off with explosions and gunfire. Yet I do feel that the stage could be set a little more carefully here, so I'm interested on comments on the pacing.

-The field = the internet of the future, in the most basic terms. It's physical, controlled by powerful men, and quite a massive force to wield.

Interesting opening. I'm not sure if you want to go for a realistic or fantastical form of space opera, but I'll just let you know that the protagonists can't have "hidden" in space like they appear to have done here. Any vessel capable of supporting human life would be showing up on thermal sensors for light seconds around, and I don't think the wreckage is quite that large. Barbariser

The field messes with those. The field creates actual objects in its space, not holograms or whatever, so all a thermal sensor would see would be hundreds of dots of all the clutter and cruft that the field had created. The only way they were noticed was when the field pointed them out visually.

No plot holes here, buddy! :D

Hmm, I love the concept but didn't find the writing in the opening too engaging. It just didn't grab me. It may have been due to me listening to Earl Sweatshirt at the same time, though. :lol: When things started to heat it up it became exciting, though. Before that it just seemed like it was lacking something. This is probably just me, though!

And yeah, that's a terrible description of what I mean. My apologies lol.

Sci-fi=you have me as a reader automatically. I am definitely interested in seeing this thing come together. You got an ETA on when we'll be seeing this up and running?Sharpie125

Within the next week. I already have a few more pages typed but not added to the Google Docs, so I might finish that section off and give it a shove.

[QUOTE="Sharpie125"]Sci-fi=you have me as a reader automatically. I am definitely interested in seeing this thing come together. You got an ETA on when we'll be seeing this up and running?Aberinkulas

Within the next week. I already have a few more pages typed but not added to the Google Docs, so I might finish that section off and give it a shove.

You've got some competition in the form of Nostos. Better make that thing a hella interesting!

Oh, and, it owns so far.