Pellet 3, Chapter 2

I've decided that Pellet has been a "free man" for too long for me to try and make money off him. I'll never be motivated enough to make a living off writing anyway, so I'd rather let anyone who wants to read my stuff :P

Anyway, Pellet 3:II is here, google-doc'd in order to at least alleviate my syntax issues...

'in a voice designed by nature and practice to be heard above crowds'

Love that description! :D

"'m Pellet."

Is that a typo or did he say "'m?'"

Anyway, great job. But I want more! :(

As for writing for a living there's few writers that can survive on the money they can fromw riting I suppose. Most of them do need a day job! :D

Yay!

(I havent' read it yet, btw :P)

Yeah! I love your Pellet series. :D

"Hey!" he shouted, managing to get his legs underneath him and run along instead of being dragged forward, "What are you doing?!"
"Helping you!" came the response. It was a girl's voice, Pellet noted absently, but he was too busy trying to prevent himself from falling over to ascertain anything more about his mysterious new acquaintance.Blade_Tr4iner

It doesn't sound like he's running to me, but more like he's stumbling along and jogging at a leisurely pace. Maybe you should add a sense of urgency to Eli's voice to make it sound more convincing... though maybe it's just me.

he turned silence as he felt a hand on his shoulder, and Eli looked at him, still smiling but no longer laughing.Blade_Tr4iner

I think you meant "he turned silent..."

"No dear, I have it well in hand. Besides, won't your parents worry if you're out so late."Blade_Tr4iner

There needs to be a question mark; otherwise, you should rewrite your sentence to something like "Besides, your parents will worry if you're out so late."

That's about it! It's a great read, very nice at the end of a long day. :)