[QUOTE="Welis"]Hey guys. The deadline is for tommorow so i need to ensure if i have done this correctly, check any grammer error if you can please. I am from Norway and i don't know if this is good enough. I'll let you guys judge it. Thank you. =)
(Note: They are censoring life''s.t.y.l.e'' weird.
Short Story Analysis
Synopsis
Themes, Setting, Plot and Characters.
''Thank you Ma'm''
If this is the title of the story, then you need to capitalise "you," since "you" is a pronoun.
Themes
Thank you M'am's story primarily falls within the urban opera genre and explores themes such as urban life**** (comma goes here) redemption and robbery. The story is very common to modern life****in the urban street(s) where poor kids try to snatch purse(s) from defenseless adults.
Setting
Thank you M'am is set in the racism era where the African American(s) lived their life ("lives") of poor economic life**** (period goes here) According to the author Langston Hughes, this was written around the 1930's (the apostrophe is unnecessary here) where racism were ("was") a huge topic in the southern (capital "S") state(s). Back in that era many African Americans had problem(s) looking for a job or getting job(s). The time when poverty was needed (? Poverty was needed?), and the rubbish society where the black (people) had to fight for their freedom.
Plot
The story begins on a dark night (colon goes here; consider revising this into a sentence) a big black woman (Known as Mrs. Luella Bates Washington Jones) is walking down the street alone and fearless. The author wanted the readers to know walking in the street alone in that time, (comma is unnecessary) if you are black is dangerous. As she wanders in the dark, a white boy ambushed (be careful; you just changed from present tense to past tense. Change this to "ambushes") her from behind by snatching her purse. Unfortunately, the purse weighted ("weighed") too much for the boy ("Who was called" Roger) (comma goes here) thus then he fell to the ground. The large woman (consider calling her by name from now on, now that you've introduced her) immediately grabbed the boy (consider calling him by name from now on) and then this is how it goes (colon goes here instead of the period).
As the plot progressing ("progresses"), the woman takes the boy to her house and shows her humble and generous expression to the boy. (this sentence does not make sense) She treated the boy with utter respect. Roger planned to make his escape although he was too scared to make such hesitation. (this makes no sense. Hesitation is when you pause, and this is not something you'd expect Roger to do in this sentence) Mrs. Luella is a spiritual person believing in ("who believes in") god. Even ("though") the boy did something wrong she still gave him a chance (you slipped tenses again). She even gave him ten dollars to buy himself a ("pair of") blue suede shoes. This is an act of redemption.
And in the end Mrs. Luella released the boy, (semicolon goes here instead of the comma) he wanted to say something (, "but") unfortunately he didn't and then Mrs. Luella shut the door.
Characters
Mrs. Luella Bates Washington Jones is one of the first characters to appear in the short story. She is generous, humble, spiritual and passion ("passionate"). Her name comes from the slavery in 1620 era (This sentence makes no sense. Consider changing to "her name was given to her by slave owners in the 1620s").
Mrs. Luella('s) job is in a hotel beauty shop that stayed open late. She lives in a small house and share (s) rooms with other roomers ("roomates"). She is a spiritual person, (semicolon goes here instead of comma) when she tells the boy that she did bad things in her life as well, this is how it goes (colon goes here) ''I have done things too, which I would not tell you, son – neither tell god, if he didn't already know (period goes here)'' As in general many people make their redemption. (comma goes here in place of period) So did Mrs. Luella by giving the boy a chance in life and ("by") giving him 10 bucks to buy himself a pair ("of") blue suede shoes since he wanted it so really bad.
Roger is the second character to appear in the short story. A ruthless boy and very unforgiving. (change this to a comma; it is a sentence fragment otherwise) His goal was to snatch a purse from a defenseless woman (which he thought) ("(or so he thought)") yet unfortunately (consider changing to "fortunately") he failed. He has to be skinny if he couldn't possess ("carry") the weight of the purse, (instead of "even then," try "because of this" and change the comma to a semicolon) even then he got owned (I wouldn't advice using the word "owned" in an essay. Instead, consider using "pummeled") by the black large woman. When inside the house, Mrs. Luella went out of sight and the boy had his chance to make his escape. And the purse was lying on the bed, he could snatch it and run away. Thus ("thus" doesn't fit here) instead, he stayed. He even tried to ask her if she needed milk (semicolon goes here) he could go to store and buy it. In the end, he couldn't resist to thank Mrs. Luella.
My opinions
The short story was an easy story to read and understand. What I believe is ("is" doesn't go here) Author Langston Hughes wanted the readers to understand ("is" goes here) that the African Americans are not vile or low (consider changing to "poorly") educated. They have emotion(s), understanding and ("are") supportive (of what? Consider broadening this point). I don't know any (consider changing to "the") background story of Mrs. Luella, (semicolon goes here in place of comma) she has to be married by looking at her name and somehow she was raised during the slavery era by (consider changing to "with") the name she was given. As for the boy (comma goes here) he is poor (comma goes here) I guess.
I wonder what he was doing so late, (semicolon goes here in place of comma) where are his parents(?)(S)houldn't they take care of him or something? Maybe their ("his") parents were racist? Or maybe they don't care about him anymore because he is ruthless. Again, he wanted a new pair of shoes, ("so") he could just ask Mrs. Luella instead of snatching her purse. Guess he learned his lesson. Nevertheless, ("Nevertheless" doesn't fit here) I have no more to say about this.
Theokhoth
My comments in red. If English isn't your first language, then this was pretty good.
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