A new Poem I just wrote.

It is about anger and trauma related to family issues.

Does this fighting ever end?

My father yells I try to blend.

I cannot help but try to mend

these emotional scars and macabre thoughts I Dwell on Day and Day.

Go get some help young man they always say.

Read the bible and try to pray.

I remember these words as my Father grabs my Mother.

**** YOU! I exclaim as I grab my brother.

I try to comfort his little soul but my vain attempts won't make him whole.

I hate my father

I always have

his drinking, beating, and scornfull speech.

Needing solace I walk upstairs

trying to control my raging flairs.

I lay on my bed listening to the Chaos bellow.

God, do I want my father dead

but I choose to take my own instead.

poetry doesn't need to rhyme, that's just a tip.

However, as a narrative piece, this isn't that bad.

poetry doesn't need to rhyme, that's just a tip.

However, as a narrative piece, this isn't that bad.

kayn83

I do write quite a lot of free verse as well. It isn't my best by far mainly because I cooked it up in 15 minutes:P

Poetry makes me cringe. Can't stand it. Nothing against your poem (I couldn't even finish reading it). I just hate poetry.Lobster_Ear

Thats really too bad...

Sad poem

I can relate to many of the things you wrote, as I too, grew up with an alcoholic/abusive father. Things are much better now, though.



I don't know if I can necessarily say the poem was "good" per say, being that the base of the poem is so dark and sadening. Although, I'm not a big fan of rhyming poems.

It was well made I guess

But a little too depressing for my tastse

it would make a great screamo song. you definitely have talent, but i couldnt really connect. think about your audience next time.Xeros606

I consider OT a melting pot of personal preferences:| I wasn't expecting everyone to like it I just wanted to share my work.

Very emo, therefore, uncool.JurockDaRock

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