[QUOTE="fmacraze"]wow. i swaer he just messaged me saying he's gonna write a poem... funnydarkhadowRate mine, please, I need some pointers. Your hair flows and God knows Where it all ends, where it all goes Through the do-si-dos and the throes of existence I can't stand your seemingly adept resistance I can't survive via only subsistence I need you, please listen I love you
Do-si-do? XD
sorry, I personaly wouldnt use it but I dont think it was horrible, but do-si-do kills it for me, I think you need to find another word.
Maybe to-and-fro?
And Spasms of existance?
Resistance to what?
Subsistence is existing btw.
Sorry, you asked for a rating, not a dissection.
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