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#1 Film-Guy
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Well after lots of school work and a part time job it has been tough to develop my book that much. I have decided to make it a lot longer than I planned before. For those who know the original story and the idea of the pillars may be a bit surprised with the way I took the story. This part of the story takes place half in the pillar world and half out. I may even split it between two books. Well this is the new updated story, its a bit more far fetched than the original, I think its adds more depth:D

the backstory is the pillar world within a giant circular mountain, there are two worlds within the mountain, the people who live on top of the pillar are more advanced while the people below are more primative. But one girls mistake of leaving the pillars for the world below will change the world below forever.

The four main characters are the girl ( lets call her elize for now) the man who protects the pillars with a large group of others ( lets call him ronin for now, cliche but I will just change it later) the man who is determined to get past ronin to get to the pillars and to discover their secret ( I will call him Ian for now) and the father of Elize who tries to get her back. Both Ronin and Ian want to see what is on top of the pillars, but ronin hides it.

the new twist I have added to the story is a concept I have called centerplay ( dont ask why I call it that) which adds a big layer to the story. Ronins character has been protecting the pillars all his life and has no idea what he is guarding until Elize comes down from the pillars. Centerplay means that ronin is the center of the world he lives in, he cant create anything like a god or something like that, but the world around him changes depending on him. If he is injured or dieing the world within the mountain will start to fall apart. So now while Elize attempts to get back to the top of the pillars she has to deal with the fact that if ronin dies, so does the world around her.

The centerplay idea will continue into the next book where it is a major plot device, it may even be the main plot, who knows:P

I promise to update more, i just got a crap load of school work and a part time job.

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#2 BobbyTurkalino
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It sure sounds a lot like my story...the story I've started writing..right...now.
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#3 soldier-dark
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Sounds better than the previous version.
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#4 Jocubus
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Does this sound like a horrible waste of time to anyone else?
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#5 soldier-dark
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It sure sounds a lot like my story...the story I've started writing..right...now.HillyBilly
Sucks for you, you started too late.
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#6 salty5674
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haha sounds kinda like an anime. What are these pillars that you speak of and whats the title? I have actually thought of a couple books I want to write, i'm not really going to work on them until I'm in college.

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#7 Film-Guy
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Sounds better than the previous version.soldier-dark

yeah the last version was way too basic, it needed something to spice it up.

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Can I have a free copy of your book when you finish?:oops:
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#9 Film-Guy
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Can I have a free copy of your book when you finish?:oops:-OpaK-

if your a good boy:P

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#10 Film-Guy
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Does this sound like a horrible waste of time to anyone else?Jocubus

guess I've wasted a lot time already:(

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#11 StevenCrockett6
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Sounds pretty cool. :D

It reminded me of Midgar from FF7 at first, with the richer people living on the advanced, industrial plate at the top, and with the slums below.

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[QUOTE="-OpaK-"]Can I have a free copy of your book when you finish?:oops:Film-Guy

if your a good boy:P

Can I get a signed copy. I want it to say. From Film-Guy aka (real name) to o_sausage
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#13 nodgenico
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Wow, sounds good, good luck.
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#14 Film-Guy
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[QUOTE="Film-Guy"]

[QUOTE="-OpaK-"]Can I have a free copy of your book when you finish?:oops:o_sausage

if your a good boy:P

Can I get a signed copy. I want it to say. From Film-Guy aka (real name) to o_sausage

sure:D what if my real name was film guy though:D then again there is a guy wanting to be called microsoft zune so nothing should surprise you:P

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[QUOTE="Film-Guy"]

[QUOTE="-OpaK-"]Can I have a free copy of your book when you finish?:oops:o_sausage

if your a good boy:P

Can I get a signed copy. I want it to say. From Film-Guy aka (real name) to o_sausage

I want an autographed copy too:o

but dont dedicate it to me, I want to be able to sell this bad boy on eBay some day8)

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Whatever happend to me being the half tree half man character?
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#17 Film-Guy
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Whatever happend to me being the half tree half man character?Nemme

he comes later:) since he is half tree and half man I shall call him......treeman!

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#18 o_sausage
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[QUOTE="o_sausage"][QUOTE="Film-Guy"]

[QUOTE="-OpaK-"]Can I have a free copy of your book when you finish?:oops:Film-Guy

if your a good boy:P

Can I get a signed copy. I want it to say. From Film-Guy aka (real name) to o_sausage

sure:D what if my real name was film guy though:D then again there is a guy wanting to be called microsoft zune so nothing should surprise you:P

Well my real name is OSX Leapord so it would make sense.
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#19 Film-Guy
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[QUOTE="Film-Guy"][QUOTE="o_sausage"][QUOTE="Film-Guy"]

[QUOTE="-OpaK-"]Can I have a free copy of your book when you finish?:oops:o_sausage

if your a good boy:P

Can I get a signed copy. I want it to say. From Film-Guy aka (real name) to o_sausage

sure:D what if my real name was film guy though:D then again there is a guy wanting to be called microsoft zune so nothing should surprise you:P

Well my real name is OSX Leapord so it would make sense.

you should get it changed to Vista ultimate, has a nice ring to it:P

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#20 cell1138
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sounds cool. im making my own book (ideas) but i cant describe it. you'd have to be in my mind to understand it.
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#21 Film-Guy
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sounds cool. im making my own book (ideas) but i cant describe it. you'd have to be in my mind to understand it.cell1138

it took me a while to put this idea on paper since it sounded worse or odd on paper, but much better in my head oddly enough.

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#22 FlaminDeath
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Nice job adding depth to the origional story Film-guy.
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#23 Film-Guy
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Nice job adding depth to the origional story Film-guy.FlaminDeath

yeah I thought the original idea I had was a bit too basic, it was really simple and there wasnt much of a thread or any twists. Now with this idea I can take it beyond the world of the collums and maybe even create a whole world the characters explore. Maybe even a few books if i am lucky:D

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#24 FlaminDeath
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[QUOTE="FlaminDeath"]Nice job adding depth to the origional story Film-guy.Film-Guy

yeah I thought the original idea I had was a bit too basic, it was really simple and there wasnt much of a thread or any twists. Now with this idea I can take it beyond the world of the collums and maybe even create a whole world the characters explore. Maybe even a few books if i am lucky:D

Sweet, I want a signed copy too since I helped so much the first time you posted. :D
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#25 123Dan123
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Very interesting concept you got there. It sounds like it can go into many different/exciting directions. Keep us updated and also make updates on your blog because I'm an active blog reader. :D

I also enjoy writing, and started a novel last summer. I got through one chapter, and then college started. So I haven't worked on it since.

Make sure you maintain a consistent routine to write everyday if possible. Because losing your motivation is very easy when you have many things going on in life.
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#26 Film-Guy
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[QUOTE="Film-Guy"]

[QUOTE="FlaminDeath"]Nice job adding depth to the origional story Film-guy.FlaminDeath

yeah I thought the original idea I had was a bit too basic, it was really simple and there wasnt much of a thread or any twists. Now with this idea I can take it beyond the world of the collums and maybe even create a whole world the characters explore. Maybe even a few books if i am lucky:D

Sweet, I want a signed copy too since I helped so much the first time you posted. :D

signed copies for all:D

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#27 Film-Guy
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Very interesting concept you got there. It sounds like it can go into many different/exciting directions. Keep us updated and also make updates on your blog because I'm an active blog reader. :D

I also enjoy writing, and started a novel last summer. I got through one chapter, and then college started. So I haven't worked on it since.

Make sure you maintain a consistent routine to write everyday if possible. Because losing your motivation is very easy when you have many things going on in life. 123Dan123

its tough with school work and my job but i will try:D

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#29 Film-Guy
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well thanks for all the help and input guys, I have finally started writing it. I had to toss my old copy which was only a few pages since I revised the story a lot. I hope I get it done soon:) I wouldnt mind some more feeback though, I wanna make this as good as possible:P
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#30 patrickmanx
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If your book gets to Chile, i would get one
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#31 Film-Guy
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If your book gets to Chile, i would get onepatrickmanx

I hope it gets that far, who knows what might happen.