ive been writing a book for some time now, it was origonally for school, but since schools over ill just write for fun:P. id just like to know it u like it:D
*WARNING* this story will probably SUCK!!! remember that im not even a teenager yet:P
Eyes of the Storm
A twelve year long war rages between the planets of Alvedoria and Devoritaria, two planets of the Sevedi system. The origin of the war is currently unkown, but it seems to revolve around the commanders of the two planet's armys. The Alvedorian commander is Gasgalia Valuse, a man with a past as obscured as his present. The Devoritarian commander is Alundia Vasculu, a very couragous man who is cappable of incredible feats. The link between them is also unknown.
Six years before the present day, a soldier was wounded durring battle. His name is Corpral Zukka Uchivara. His family was killed shortly after his wound. He lost his wife, daughter, son, and other daughter. They were killed by a group of professional assassins. Uchivara never went back to war. The commander thought that it was because of the emotional stress of losing his family.
It wasnt. He was really rasing his youngest son, Kraig. He trained him in basic hand-to-hand combat, swordplay, and sharpshooting. Kraig grew into a very talented young man. When he turned 14, he was able to join the war. He couldnt wait. Kraig wanted to follow in his fathers foot steps.
Kraig'slife was easy, even though he never met his mother or siblings. He was only two when they died. He wont have a good time in the war. He will go through pain, suffering, sadness, love, happiness, and anger. He knows what must be done, just not all that must be done.
He is the one, the one with the Eyes of the Storm.
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that would probably be a good opening sequence, but what do u think of the story layout? i just want opinions, but i made sure that i didnt put in spoilers:P. yup book spoilers:lol:. never heard that before. but really, what do ya think?
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