I tried to describe sort of what im feeling now. (being home alone in the dark isnt my thing). But i thought that maaking the sentences shorter might add a feeling of (i dont know the right word for it) rush? In order to portray that the narrator is feeling desperate and paranoid.
Im 15. I wrote this story for english class. I would like constructive opinions..
IN MY HEAD..
As I sit on the uncomfortable chair, I sit there free of worry like if nothings wrong. Its 7:13. Some sunlight shines through a little window in the next room. Not necessarily a yellow sun. But more of a gloomy average day sun. After all it was just an average day. Nothing out of the ordinary. Slowly minute by minute the only radiance from outside dims.
Time flew literally,, while i saw at my computer. It is now pitch black outside and in every other room but the room residing behind me. The only light around me is the light from my computer. Everywhere else darkness has fallen. Its not easy to be alone and paranoid and the same time. Every little sound crashes against your eardrums. From the sound of the computer fan to the sound of the wind faintly blowing outside.
The more paranoid i get the more noise are noticeable. Wether they exist or not is trivial. At random moments I would hear buzzing from somewhere behind me. As I go up the stairs to pee the feeling of fear grows inside me like a cancer as I begin to believe someone is following me. I look out the bathroom window and hallucinations fill my mind. I tell myself its all in my head.
I continue doing what I have been doing for the past hour. Walls begin to get darker. The sensation of being watched keeps floating around my head. Cracks and thumps randomly make themselves apparent upstairs. Claustrophobia attacks me as the room seems to get smaller. Darkness seems to grow. Telephones are somewhere in the dark. Cellphone is dead. I keep telling myself its all in my head.
Sounds upstairs send chills up my spine. Tapping? Footsteps? Whatever it is, it is creeping the **** out of me. My head starts to spin. My dog seems to be frozen as if he has seen a ghost. My sisters dolls stare at me as if their trying to speak. As i stare back they seem to be moving. Slowly but its still moving. Noises all around me crash against my ears. The door that leads outside shoots open. The wind shrieks louder than ever. I try to ignore but i cant. I tell my self ...its all in my head...its all in my head...its all in my head...its all in my head...its all in my head...its all in my head.
I would have said best fight. but fighting is never good.
Either way i have never gotten into a real fight. More like a little friendly rumble with my cousin. Hes 13 im 15. Im 140 He is about 160. When i got home one day from school he tackled me from behind into the house. I had no idea who it was so i elbow backwards. THen he lets me stand up and i just start laughing and i felt relieved too. After i said hello he tackles me again into a doornob so i push back till hes in a walk and i start punching his stomach. Some time during this little friendly rumble he ran my head into a wall. THe wall didnt break and it wasnt a really hard wall. It was preety much especially cause i won after punching him in back.
So yea I'm bored. So just talk about funny or cool fights you have been. Wether it was real or just messing around.
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