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#251 Foolz3h
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Thanks Helios! :D

 

I can't write poems

 

I can't write poems

It's true you see

But if I could

Lyrically

I'd be Talib Kweli.


I can't write poems

It's true you see

I'm reduced to biting raps

And jacking Jay-Z.

 

Oh I did it again

But I can't resist

Cause if I stop then I'll slip

And if I slip then I'm slippin'.

 

But there's hope for me

I'll give up the rap game

I'll give up the fame

Then I'll pull a lame

Comeback album

Called We Are Lasers

And when I don't bite

I'll rhyme haters with lasers

In a song about bathers

Featuring Marshall Mathers.

 

But I know I gotta stop

Cause I'm just a little rich kid

Who's never touched a Glock.

I'll call up the Grim Reaper

Tell him all of my grief

I asked to be a poet

But I…wasn't.

 

I'll turn on my oven for about four hours

Light up a blunt and kiss my arse goodbye

I gassed myself cause it's a suicide.

 

I can't write poems so I killed myself

Thanks for the challenge that pushed me off the shelf.

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#252 waZelda
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Tough one!

Good work guys, especially foolz and helios.

The winner is helios.

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#253 Foolz3h
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Last challeneg of the month:

Write a short story beginning with "Purple People Eater" and ending with "Beep beep".

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#254 waZelda
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"Purple people eater?" Leo looked up from the cover. "Seriously, Joe, what kind of music is this."

"Have you never heard of them? They are world famous."

Leo shook his haid. "That's because everything that has sold ten thousand copies is called world famous these days."

"Good point," Joe admited. "But hey, a band that gives all their songs out on vinyl has to be good, right?"

Joe got it started and sat down. Before the music started he said: "I hear it's the kind of music that just sucks you in."

The vinyl started playing and with a loud SWISH, both Joe and Leo were sucked into the LP.

"I guess whoever you talked to weren't kidding," Leo said astunished as he got up and looked around. The inside of the LP had a cool, purple colour. In the distance, they could hear music. They walked in the direction of the music and discovered what looked like quite a party.

"Let's join," Joe said eagerly, but was stopped by a six foot nine guard with shoulders three foot wide.

"Not so fast there, buddy," the guard said. "Are you guys eighteen?"

They looked at each other. "We kind of forgot our IDs," Joe said.

"Then I'm sorry, but you've got to go." The guard said. He drew up a remote, pointed at the two of them and clicked.

Beep beep.

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#255 honkyjoe
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"Purple People Eater and Beep Beep!" exclaimed the announcer as the two most popular childrens TV characters walked out to great their little guests. PPE (Pee-Pee as the kids calleds him) scampered around the stage wearing a large white victorian cumberbund with his fluffy shoes and massive belly, both dyed a thickly disgusting purple. Beep-Beep was wearing his usual yellow horn nose and a black and white checkered truckers hat. Around his unusually skinny chest was a full mechanics suit. How kids found this crap entertaining is still beyond me...

After the cheers of the toddlers died down the two idiots began their less than spectacular skits.

"Hey Beep-Beep?" asked Pee-Pee.

"Wutt Peaa-Peaa?" responded Beep-Beep in an incredibly dopey answer.

Pee-Pee walked over to Beep-Beep and smacked him in the face.

"Beep Beep!"

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#256 Foolz3h
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The purple people eater looked up at the polka dot bikini.

"Fancy a bite to at, bob?"

"Do I ever!" the purple people eater replied, "let's go to McDonald's, Ted."

"No," the polka dot bikini shook its straps, "McDonald's gives me gas, and they're so far away what about Souvlaki Hut?"

"Souvlaki Hut?" he laughed, "I don't ethnic food."

"What? You don't eat ethnic food? Why? Does if give you gas?"

"No," he laughed. "Of course not, but there food is as dirty as their women, and their women have syphilis."

"Wow, well I just remembered I gotta go, so I'll talk to you later."

"Oh?" the purple people eater grinned. "You aren't going anywhere. I know where your family is from."

"But I'm only one eight ethnic!" the polka dot bikini pleaded. "It was enough for Hitler to be saved!"

"But sister," the purple people eater laughed as he cocked his double barrel shotgun. "You ain't Hitler."

"Nein!" cried the polka dot bikini but it was too late.

Boom! Boom!

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#257 Foolz3h
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First challenge of the month:

In story form tell us exatly what horrors Hatch No.4815162342 contains! In short story form, of course!

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#258 Aberinkulas
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There lives beneath the hatch a horrid, dispicable creature. No one knows its true name, but they know that it lives and breathes deeply, sighing with the wind in its ghastly, intoning voice. Some say it crawls out of the Hatch, its eyes etended from its body in terrible ways to look about and see what kind of prey it could possibly torture next.

They call it...iloveflash. And it is indeed a hideous beast.

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#259 iloveflash
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*Breathing deeply.*

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#260 Foolz3h
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Therre was a hatch in the middle of a terrible jungle. In the jungle the natives lived in fear of the hatch because legend had it that a terrible beast dwelled inside. But one day a brave---perhaps foolish---boy from the village sneaked out to the hatch and wrenched it open with the sheer strength of determination. He climbed inside, the hatch closing after him, and he was never seen again. Never until 10 years later. He emerged onto a video game forum where he found his way to a union. It was not until he found the union that he had been seen since his disappearance. But the beast that he had turned into was truly a hideous one. He had long forgotten his real name and had chosen the moniker of iloveflash for in the hatch he had nothing to do except watch a flash version of The Genie Chronicles (like-wise one arm was much stronger than the other) and he had been turned into a terrible beast that talked to kitchen sinks and told them of his attempted romances. And now he survives only by dancing with his arse exposed so that the members of the menu may pinch and fondle it at awill.

And the beast of the hatch? He said that the hatch was completely empty.

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#261 helios_rietberg
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Challenge for 11th April 2009:

The local newspaper is sending out a full scholarship offer to one lucky winner for an opportunity to learn about game design, first-hand, from the winner's favourite game designing company! The only entry requirement is that you have to write a two-hundred word piece of writing of no particular form (so, prose or poetry, doesn't really matter) describing your experience with video games, why you would want to learn game design, and why YOU should be the one to be sent on this mind-blowing experience!

For the challenge, write your entry for a chance to win... Prestige Points!

Happy Easter!

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#262 honkyjoe
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It all started 7 years ago. My father, who had a major drinking problem, would beat my poor mother who happened to be a quadraplegic. I knew I should stop my father from doing the things he did, but I was to much of a p****. My arms were small and I was very short (under 5 feet tall) and I knew I couldn't stand up to my father. But I found a way.

That week, Silent Killer 2: Revenge, made its first appearance on store shelves. The game (which throughs you into the mind of a pissed off teen who decides to kill the neighborhood) let me discover who I really was. I stopped caring that my paralyzed mother was getting f***** up everyday, and in turn, I started to rid the neighborhood of Carnegie Heights of all the patronizing parents, It was a completely enlightening experience. Without this game I wouldn't be where I am today. My life is good and I have renewed my faith in humanity.

So the reason I write to you, is because I want to be able to change childrens lives through the means of deplorable violence. When disgruntled youth have a way to let go of their stress it molds them into better people. With this scholarship I could be the driving influence of change to the world. Think of Barack Obama times 10000000!!! THAT COULD BE ME!

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#263 aliblabla2007
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Well, let's see. My gaming collection hangs at around 100-odd. I've had modding experience with at least 10 of them, doing all sorts of things... like changing the health of each unit, turning machineguns into automatic nuclear weapons and making 100-man squads from their original sizes of ten. That's not what a developer might want, but I'm perfectly capable of catering to developers who want things less... extreme. Now, it's not necessarily easy to do things like that. Depending on how complex a game is, it can range from being about as hard as cracking glass with a mallot to trying to build a @#&!#@(#!@ house with your bare hands. There are some games where I've had to put in hours to edit their files, more hours to test them, and more hours to balance them afterwards. So, obviously, making mods requires patience and skill. Making ENTIRE GAMES requires EVEN MORE GODDAMN patience and skill. And I'VE GOT THAT. So YOU BETTER MAKE ME A GODDAMN DESIGNER, because IT WON'T BE TOO DAMN HARD TO BLOODY TRAIN ME HOW TO DO IT.
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#264 Foolz3h
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Thanks to iloveflash for the challenge:

"An extremely obese man is eating a bowl of spaghetti using only his big toe. Descirbe this scenario as vaguely OR as descriptively as possible."

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#265 helios_rietberg
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Tough one!

Winner of the challenge for 11th April 2009: Aliblabla2007!

Congratulations! Special mention of honkyjoe's entry, which (aside from being the only other entry) is highly creative in itself!

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#266 Foolz3h
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An extremely obese man was eating a bowl of spaghetti with his toe. While he was eating it he also had some toe jam. When he was finished both meals he licked his toes with satisfaction.

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#267 evrdayblues
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Awakened by hunger, I slowly moved my head and eyes to see if there was any food left from last night. Boy I must have eaten the whole fridge. The couch screeched as I moved; it always screeched. It was a screechy couch it was. Had nothing to do with my proportions, of course. Finally setting my eyes on a bowl of spaghetti, I decided to eat it in the most unseemly manner ever witnessed by mankind. Reaching for my feet, I struggled to pull off my socks. They were dirty, they had to come off. After five minutes of wrestling and many a screech, the left one was off. That should be enough, I though. Eyeing the stale bowl of pasta on the small table in front of me, I reached for the ground and landed my foot on the carpet. More efforts...more screeching...

Finally, I managed to drag the carpet closer to me and with it the small table it was under. When the table was within reach of my foot, I dipped my big toe in the bowl and scooped out a hefty sample of spaghetti. The sauce was cold; it was dripping on the carpet, but I didn't care, I was hungry, I was always hungry. I don't know how I managed to get that pasta to my mouth using only my toe, and arms but it sure was a good workout. I plan on having pasta at least three times a week now. If that won't get me in shape, nothing will.

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#268 iloveflash
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Dude, lol. :lol:
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#269 waZelda
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Challenge of 04/25-09:

Write a top three list of most funny things to get tatooed on you. You should also specify where it should be tatooed. As an example, here is my list.

1. Message above your butt: "If you read this, I probably gave you clamydia"

2. Message on your butt: "Mind the gap!"

3. Message in your forehead: "Out of order"

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#270 iloveflash
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1: Big message on left cheek: "Tattoo #1! 2 Moar 2 Go!"

2: Message on inside of crotch: "Obvious 1! 1 Moar!"

3: Tiny message inside of knee: "Not here."

4: Minuscule message under fold of skin of third left toe: "Congratulations!!"

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#271 evrdayblues
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•1. Across chest, it reads: "Perpetuating Tattoo Regret Since 1976"

•2. Left shoulder, it reads: "Disco Forever!"

•3. Right shoulder, it reads: "I Hate Disco..."

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#272 aliblabla2007
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I'm going to do Foolz's challenge at the last minute (seeing as the winner hasn't been announced yet) because the following one was released ahead of schedule:

I peeked into the open windows of the house, shrouded by the darkness of night. In its hall, I saw what seemed to be a giant ball of flesh, three metres wide and a few feet shorter than it was fat. I heard noises emanating from the man - I was facing his bare, lumpy back, a sight so ghastly I felt like tearing out my eyeballs with my fingers - and said sounds were nausea-inducing.

 To satisfy my curiosity, I decided to enter through the window, silently squeezing my thin, small body through the house's square orifice. Aside from the "man", the hall contained only a single set of furniture - one of the pieces, a couch, looked like somebody had died on it, and the arms of the long, cushioned chair were distended - almost cruelly, I might add.

 As the sounds from the fleshball increased in frequency and volume, I sneaked around the couch, which he had his side turned to, so I could take a closer look at what he was doing.

 Boy, was that a mistake.

 The man, from my side view, wore only a flimsy strip of fabric to cover his nether regions. From the front of him, I would have thought that he was a male version of Octomum. His face seemed to be directly joined to his body - no neck or chin was discernible. Only several dozen rolls of fat lay between his gigantic mouth and his gigantic chest-potrusions, which I considered unseemly for any man to have.

  And he was doing something even more disgusting than what he actually was.

The big toe of his left leg, looking more like a thick stump than an actual limb, proceeded to dig into a bowl of Spaghetti that happened to be right in front of him. The noises - now seemingly amplified by the vomit-inducing horror of it all - were composed of squishy, slimy "slaps" as the giant lifted his toe from the seemingly tiny bowl and its equally tiny contents to his mouth, and he licked it clean before returning it again to the poor thing that contained his meal.

 Before I knew it, I puked. Having had no stop at the restroom for lunch and dinner, the many contents of my stomach emptied out of my body through my own mouth, taking the shape of fleshy paste.

 And the man noticed.

He stared at me for a while, then looked down at my gift. I was too weak to move; I just observed the flesh ball as he attempted to turn his body around ninety degrees; it took him several minutes, and his other leg knocked over the bowl of spaghetti, spilling its contents onto the floor and dirtying him further.

  When he had finished, I had not moved an inch. He looked again at the two meals I had so graciously discharged, licking his lips.

He only uttered a single, short sentence:

"Oh, good, even more food."

I passed out as he attempted to slide to my half-digested waste, making screeching noises that only faded to my ear as I fell to the realm of unconsciousness.

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#273 Aberinkulas
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Tattoo on left arm: If you can read this, then you should stop staring at my effing arm.

Tattoo on right arm: If you can read this, just grab my hand. Just grab it. You know you want to.

Tattoo in the belly button region: I made this tattoo while he was asleep. As a warning - I have HIV. Just thought you might know before...well, you guys...yeah.

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#275 honkyjoe
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Tattoo #1 Two elephant tusks painted on the side of my thighs. Take a guess at what the trunk is.

Tattoo #2 An accordion on that same special male part.

Tattoo #3 turn my nipples into eyes and have a large smiley face curve around my stomach.

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#276 Foolz3h
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1. (across entire body). "Balls balls balls balls testicles."

2. a tatooed thong.

3. "They are the spice, of the life", above the thong, with an arrow pointed to the thong.

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#277 helios_rietberg
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WTH?!

Am I writing this week's challenge? I've lost count...

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#278 waZelda
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Do we have a system at all?

Anyways, the winner of the last challenge is Aberinkulas. Congratulations.

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#279 Foolz3h
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WTH?!

Am I writing this week's challenge? I've lost count...

helios_rietberg

Yes.

As for the system it's waZelda one week and then Helios at the moment, so as waZelda did the last one it's your turn, Helios. :)

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#280 helios_rietberg
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Alrighty!

Challenge for 2nd May 2009: We are all tied to this union, firstly by our passion for literature (well, sort of) and secondly for our love of video games. So... in no less than 200 words, write a piece of prose or a poem outlining, fictional or otherwise, about what video games mean to you, and why you are attracted to them! 

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#281 waZelda
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Video games are fun

As is what they should be

Video games with multiplayer

Is a great social activity

Video games are challenging

And put you skills to the test

Video games has music

That's different from the rest

And most importantly I say

Video games are stories

Told in a different way

You are the hero

It is you who save the princess

Or the entire galaxy

It is you who defeat evil

And set the innocent free

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#282 Aberinkulas
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Games (at least the good ones) are electronic pieces of media designed to create emotion. Oftetimes, that emotion is useful to be in relaxing or understanding something. I rather enjoy emotion; don't you?
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#283 honkyjoe
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Like a ball from a cannon I hit you.

Unable to breathe, you fall...

With your left hand - swollen and red -

You hit your Mountain Dew,

Knocking it all over your bed.

This epiphany I bring is nothing new.

Technological advances,

Growing Communnity,

Can't you see???

I am you, you are me.

We play together, we die together.

Fighting side by side on alien worlds,

I am an escape.

No more rat race,

No more shall you feel like a mindless ape.

So here I come noobs,

Bend over, your about to gape.

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#284 Foolz3h
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Video gaming To the layman Is nothing but a toy But oh boy They are quite wrong (Most of the time) You see while it is true There are games that resemble poo But within the sewage and waste You'll find gems and armistice From the daily routine. You see like any form of media It can be truly grand Though admittedly the children's games Aren’t of the same quality as Peter Pan But it wasn't always like that It used to be that the kiddie games were great, man But now they often resemble a tragedy As messed up as Vietnam But as I said earlier If you wade through the crap You'll find a game about a boy With a green cap Who wants to get laid By a princess who's always getting kidnapped And when he kills enemies he gets paid With rubes And as benign as that sounds It’s actually malignant And about as fun as a figment Of your imagination Which I'm aware sounds quite negative But is actually quite fun So if you're sick of this terrible structure Why don't you run And play some video games Just remember it's better with rum! Ti tum, ti tum.
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#285 waZelda
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Challenge of May 10:

Write a poem where the first letter in the sentences spells a "secret" message that contradicts or supports what the rest of the poem is saying. Here is an example in case you don't understand what I mean:

-----

Searching the world for meaning

All I want is a purpose

Vage hints about who I am

Either I found out, or I die

-----

Meaning is all I desire

Ending life without discovering myself is my greatest fear.

-----

(As you can, the first letters spell "save me")

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#286 waZelda
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Here is another example:

Iasjhvyublkb

Lasutdvkejf'

Oyv%/(hpo6f0

Vjbwytcyus

Ekibio\ufd87

F.askndbiy6u

Liyurx21

Adfsg€y

Soiu75

Hiu64s

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#287 helios_rietberg
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Oh man, those responses made my day! Difficult to choose as always, but we have to have a winner!

Winner of the Challenge for the 2nd of May 2009: honkyjoe! Loved your splash of Mountain Dew, by the way...

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#288 iloveflash
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waZelda, are you trying to get me back in this thread!? Cuz it's working! :x

/ragenvy

EXTRAORDINARY HIGH FIVE.

(That was my submission. For nao.)

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#289 Foolz3h
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waZelda, are you trying to get me back in this thread!? Cuz it's working! :x

/ragenvy

EXTRAORDINARY HIGH FIVE.

(That was my submission. For nao.)

iloveflash

W/ET, WRET? :?

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#290 iloveflash
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I assume that's your submission?
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#291 Foolz3h
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Did you ever have a feeling
Eminating through your body
Just like a rush of adrenaline
And it was unpleasent yet intruging?

Very very strange it was
Umm, and it was nothing I'd ever felt before.

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#292 waZelda
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(read the next sentence in a sarcastic voice) A terribly hard choice, since both submissions were very good.

The winner is foolz

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#293 helios_rietberg
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Challenge for 17th May 2009: Recall the most physically painful experience of your life. Then, describe it through a piece of literature as something that was inherently beautiful.
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#294 waZelda
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I was climbing in the tree next to the stone wall, feeling free. Suddenly, with a wonderful sound the branch I was standing on broke. I hit the wall. My body swung perfectly backwards and the back of my head hit what was left of the branch. Crimson liquid streamed from my head like a river making its way through the landscape. And I felt the great feeling of being in shock and not knowing what was going on.

Anyways, I think that is the most painful one. However it isn't the only time I hurt my head. And I was hit by a javelin last year.

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#295 mprezzy
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Only through the mind of a child can the perspective of horrendous agony be coupled with inquisitive awe. Though I cannot recall the names of faces of those whom were once considered intimate, my mind projects an exquisite internal high-resolution image of the blood. That foreign blood, exhuberant in it's escape from the gash in my knee like a suppressed individual with the innate desire to be freed from its confines; natural as those confines may be. Only in that child's eyes could this be pereceived as wonderous and horrifying simultaneously. Only through those eyes and mind could one reflect upon the dichotomy of one's natural human form being soiled...imperfected, and yet gracefully accomplished in some inarticulatable way. As though the concept was too powerful for the small child's human brain to bear, my emotions purged. Crying, I ran to find the magical solace that heals all wounds, emotional and physical- the arms of a loving mother.
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#296 Foolz3h
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Knives and blades, rusty and clean
Wounds and stitches bloody and mean
Pain as sharp as a blade in the dark
A scream as splitting as a shattering written.
And nothing else to do
Nothing left to lose
Just pain and screaming and blood in my food.
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#297 nappan
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I'm lucky, I bleat, as I rise to my feet.... only then am I stung by the wasp.

No, I'm not submitting that, but it popped out, and I'm not putting it back!

Here's my submission:

The life of a child isn't filled with care and worry, and it was in that state I stood upon the first of a single flight of stairs. My small hand gripped the rope that served as a railing, and putting a confident foot forward, I proceeded to avoid the trouble of walking, and instead fell. Did I fall as a normal person, bouncing along the way? No. It seems, although I have no memory of it, that in my final throes of mental anguish as my balance left me, I must have launched myself skyward! Consequently, my trip to the concrete basement floor was unimpeded by the stairs.

I flew, and that was a fine thing, but landing presented a difficulty. Fortunately, my bottom served its most noble purpose, and saved my spine from collapsing like an accordion. However, that bit of tail, the coccyx, the sacrum... we know now, as educated adults that they are one with the buttocks. So then, they became one with concrete, and once numbness, shock, and the sense of Universal betrayal you see on the face of any child just before they cry from a hurt, I experienced pain I remember to this day.

My recollection of events immediately after The Fall [yes, pun] is a bit hazy, but the memory of pain remains. I will abandon any attempt at literary grace and admit that I felt as though my tuckus had been hit by a train, and my gonads were none too happy either. I can only imagine the horror my mother felt at watching me sail through the air, but the speed with which a proper railing was installed is likely a fair indication that it was terrible to witness.

Astoundingly, I was uninjured, save for my pride and trust in stairs. However, to this day I thank and appreciate the cleaved flesh I sit on even now, for saving my life, if not my dignity.



Ok, total side note, and runner up in terms of pain (this is not a submission, just fun)... as an adult, I had to get a root canal procedure performed on a tooth that had grown without a crown. In other words, the took was a shell around perfectly formed gum tissue that filled the tooth. It was painless and not infected, but obviously had to be fixed. What many people unfamiliar with the dental professions may not realize, is that most of the pain from a root canal occurs as a result of abscess formed when the infection reaches the nerve. Needless to say, what follows is simply more pain, but then relief.

I was in no pain and young, if not a child. The periodontist, who was a kind and urbane man to his credit, was presented with a unique chance! Normally to numb the nerve within the pulp of a tooth, the relevant cranial nerve is blocked with Novocain, and then a hole drilled in the crown of the tooth. Through this hole, another shot of Novocain is administered to the root of the tooth itself. This always hurts I imagine, but without any Novocain (as it was in my case) I found this doc plunging the business end of the syringe into the already exposed center of the tooth.

It is the only time in my life, I nearly struck someone out of pure reaction. I did bite down on the syringe, and I think I mumbled something unflattering around a mouthful of nerve-pain about the doc's ancestor's hygienic practices (or lack thereof) and speculations as to whether his ancestors may have been the missing link. I'm not kidding for the sake of writing this, I'm just telling it as it was. Falling on my rear might have hurt more, but I was less aware... a child.

It's all downhill from there, since the Novocain on the nerve numbs it very quickly, but I will still never forget it. By the way... After filling, refilling, and nearly crowning... the tooth was pulled less than a year later. At that time, I had never has so much as a cavity. Oy.

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Seconds after it fell to the ground. The pain began to throb away all past reconciliations; I forgot everything. I pushed my legs into the kitchen and grabbed a small sandwich bag. After filling it with cubes of ice, I bent down. Blood still squirted with every beat of my frantic heart from the swollen nub as I scoured the red-stained ground for the rest of my finger. My eyes were not acustomed to seeing part of me laying pale and motionless, but I fought against my disgust and shock and grabbed my dismembered finger. I dialed 911 in a hurry. The longest 10 minutes of my life.

An hour later I found myself in a strange daze. A bright light pulsed into my retina as I waited for anything to stop the strange pain that lingered on my now bandaged ring finger. I opened my eyes as I heard the soft patter of a nurse walk into the room. I was confident that my discomfort would be soon squelched, hoping that she had a bottle of Vicatin; my heart skipped a beat as I noticed the 3 inch long syringe that she carried with her. I closed my eyes and leaned back against the itchy pillow.

"I'm just going to unwrap this and fix up your finger."

I used all the strength possible to keep my diatribe from escaping.

"Mhmm," I groaned.

She cut away the bloodstained gauze and lifted away the hard two piece splint. I turned my head in the other direction hoping to find a distraction that would keep me from worrying. Nothing. Just a white wall. God damnit.

She sprayed a thick coating of piss-colored iodine all over my red, exposed flesh. My left hand clenched down on the metal bar beside my bed. I felt the liquid swimming through ever mutilated piece of tissue in my finger. I kept trying to remind myself that this was the worst but I was gravely mistaken. She dabbed a piece of cloth on my wound to soak up any remained fluid; then, she lifted the syringe in the air. I turned my head and bit my lip as the sharp spire drove into my open wound; sending a pulsing wave of pain shooting through all parts of my right arm. I tried to to yell.

It came again. But this time it was worse. I knew when my hand convulsed that she had hit a tendon. I groaned in agony, trying to ignore what was happening. I couldn't. It happened four more times before I drifted into unconsciousness. My last memory being of a slow rolling chair entering a bright room.

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#299 waZelda
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I think the last challenge lasts until tomorrow, but I announce the next challenga anyways.

Challenge of May 23rd:

Write a love letter to a dictator (doesn't have to be alive today).

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#300 helios_rietberg
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OUCH. Some of those sound... very... painful...

Anyway... Winner of the Challenge of the 17th of May: Nappan. Congratulations on winning your first challenge!Â