Didn't read the last one.

Space was very well done, but there were several typos which were really jarring. Considering this is a poem (and a relatively short one at that), I am surprised you did not catch them.

Darkness has a terrible and almost completely unrelated title, but it's also pretty darn good. I'd probably say I like it the best of the two. Also, I had a feeling it was an autobiography, which made the read that much more engaging!

iloveflash

Two things to you, I have to say:

The typos in "Space" are now out, and if there are any left, they are supposed to be there.

Dagit, when I copied and pasted darkness it didn't get the last two lines. Now I'll have to put them in.

He's only immune after he gets hit by it. After that you could shoot him all day long and it wouldn't hut him. He has to be able to heal so he can take the first hit.

This is only one version of my Immortal Slayer character. The poem version in half-crazy. I'm writing another version that's got almost the same background story, but he's different enough to make him interesting. It's also not a poem. I'll post it when I'm done.

It a parallel universe thing. I eventually want to have a team of immortals from different dimensions,

Great first chapter.

I can't find anything to critque, that somebody hasn't mentioned before.

Keep writing, I'd like to read what you put in the next chapter.